You were like a moon, who brightened the path of people who lost their ways, guiding them to their destination..
You were like a fleck of snow, who melted in her warm hands, as she desperately clung on to you..
You were like a shimmering star, who sparkled brightly in the sky at night. Under whose guidance the sailors sailed their boats..
You were like a warm breeze, which imbibed her fragnence like a flower and wrapped it all around you..
You were all these things and she was everything to you.
© Rabea Kamran
13 comments:
Bea.. its lovelyyyyyyyy ....i felt i was writing it...
Exalting,
Thank you so much for the appreciation <3
y was? y not is?
its a narrative thats why..
Why is it all in 'was' ? Past tense? What about now? what about today?
Welcome back Bea, long time :)
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
I think you may want to add a twitter icon to your site. I just bookmarked this blog, but I had to do this by hand. Simply my 2 cents.
nice.
@ Anshul..
Thanx a lot for the warm welcome first of all..
It was supposed to be a narrative, a third person description, its supposed to be in past tense..
but ya it could have been she is everything to him, but i was more comfortable in writing it in past tense..
Dont worry its not about something thats long lost or gone as the description is multi dimensional, it can be her mentor, her dad, her friend, boyfriend, life partner anyone :)
@ Anonymous..
Oh am sorry it cost you 2 cents, i didn't knew how to add it but ya i would do it, btw i have a fan page and its posted there too as a note, everyone of my single work id there too, and its connected to my twitter, you can see my twitter account and tweets on the right side if you scroll down on my blog..
If there are still problems with it, do let me know :)
@ t20
Thank you, am honored :)
Very nicely done.
Thank you Andy..
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